Lucas deMey

9/14/17

Emerson

Writing prompt 3 revision strategy

 

My revision strategy is fairly simple i noticed that most of the errors in my paper were surface errors things like missing punctuation, awkward word choice and run on sentences. The way i’m going to fix these issues is by going through sentence by sentence and reading it out loud to make sure i catch any of these pesky surface errors. I also think some of my paragraphs could use some trimming in order to make sure there’s no fluff to my paper. I also  think i could better use waisks text in my paragraph about the bandwagon effect so i will reread “my crowd experiment to find quotes that will better back my claim sentence. Because the evidence i have as of now does not seem sufficient and with the trimming of fluff i may need this new evidence in order to meet the length requirement.